Okay so: how does this look now? Do you guys think I have them in the right place?
First look upon the red horizon
All awakened by my force
I am the mother and the son, the rising sun my source.
Morning’s called me many names
Gravity and untouched things
Though I am but a force unseen carried on imagined wings
As fire hangs midway in the sky
Move the ground to summon me
But only fire and force will show what I can truly be.
Day grows weary, night awakes
Five moons call to the water
A careful step upon the land but sea is too my daughter
Night black curtains drape the world
Memory and misery, rage and reason too
All are born inside of me, and I am born in you
The darkened world is stirring now
Before dawn breaks its silence
Life and death move hand in have, the minuet of violence